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New Member-Durandarte
Character Name: Durandarte Ankisubeta
How You Heard About The RP Society: Brother/rumors
How Long Have You Been Roleplaying? A few weeks
Is English Your First Language? Yes
Edit by Soifa. Old bio is in spoilers.
She spoke trying to seem brave, "Go on finish me like you did all the others," her voice quivering with fear. He just stared at her his eyes sharp and hard. "I see no reason to kill that which poses no threat to me. Your attack held no malicious intent, only fear. However if you try to strike me again I will strike you down. " He slung his sword over his back and walked away. She stayed on the ground looking at him for a few moments then got up and followed him for what reason even she didn't know. Finding his way out of the cave, the blue haired girl Aoirohime close behind, he came out into land unfamiliar to him. "Where is this place?" he asked her. "My kind call this place Paradise." She replied. He looked around and saw no war or death and decided he might stay here and try a life he had never known…
What type of character do you play? cold, fallen Spell Sword
What is your Mabinogi schedule? normally try to be on about 1.5 to 2 hours a day about 5 times a week.
How You Heard About The RP Society: Brother/rumors
How Long Have You Been Roleplaying? A few weeks
Is English Your First Language? Yes
Edit by Soifa. Old bio is in spoilers.
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A Short Biography Of Your Character: when first brought to the world he lived in emain, he had a nice peaceful life with friends and a knack for magic
and swordsmanship. after 10 years of living in emain the "tragity of emain" befell the town. he did all he could to
defend his town and defend the people so they could escape but to no success, he was able to defend the people but
the town was still obilorated. after the battle he walk through the place he once called home and he found a small
kid hidding in the ruins of the town. he took her in and they moved to tir where he honed his skills for battle for
the next 7 years. when he thought he finally had his old life back one of the towns folk attacks
yoshi she ends up getting minor cuts before dur showed up after he showed up and detained the attacker. he saw the
wounds on her blamed himself and left to go train so this would never happen again. he left his sister in
the care of the palidin order and went off to find Lugh. after a search that lasted 2 years he found a lead on
Lugh. he went into Fiodh to find the ghost and maybe ask it a question as to where the real lugh was. when he
reached the end and of the dungeon he didnt see a ghost but the morrgant.with the pride of the palidin order in his mind
he attacked him.morrgant won but did not leave unscathed. he comended him on fight so well for one at such a young
age. morgant tells Dur the truth of who he is and what has happened in his past. almost immeditly Dur falls to
one knee tells his story and asks to be take under his tutalage. Morrgant says he will so he trains for 9 years
he trained. he becomes a dark knight. one day he goes into a dungeon on his own will instead of on an order. when he
gets to he end he sees a young fomor the about the age of 15 he notices that shes trembling a bit. he asks her what is
wrong and she tries to attack him he dodges it but did not counter. he says that if she wishes to attack to put in
murderous intent she just stands there. again asks he what was wrong; she decide that talking with him would be
better than fighting him so she explains that she is new to the fomor business and that her name is aoihime.
after an hour of talking he asks her why she wears the mask she say that its is the symbol of the sireins,
but she gets cut off when he asks her why she alone wears it after thinking for a minute she cant find an answer.
Dur smiles and says he must go and starts to head for the exit, but before he leaves the room aoihime calls after
him and gives him her mask. he takes it. when he gets back to morrgant he notices the mask but leaves it alone. one
day out of the blue after morgant ordered him to attack the iria base camp. not stoping to ask why, he left. about
20 min of raidng the village a red headed figure appeared and challenged him. he recognized the figure as his sister not
wishing to harm his sister he backs down and leaves. whe he gets back to morrgant he reports in and morrgant asked him why
he left the village. dur could tell he knew already. he tells him he saw his sister and morrgant just left it at that. after
a bit more training Dur finally beats morrgant. he says he wishes to see his sister.
morrgant tells him that he no longer must answer to him and says he is a free man.so he leaves to find his sister.
he soon find his sister in the company of a paladin guild leader.he imeddiatly attacks him (guess who). after a couple
minutes of fighting and yoshi yelling at them. dur stops and listens to her. he is suprised by what has happened in
those years. he leaves zalthos but is still untrusting of him.he decides to leave again but his sister asks him to stay
longer. so he does.after a few years he comes across a macha staute. while studing it
he triggers something within the staute and he now is the demigod of darkness promptly after leaving the area of the staute.
he is confronted by fomors. he readied for a battle. he saw in the back a fomor of very high rank. in his mind he heard
remebered a story of Cichols death and a new fomor commander but he didnt beleive it and his next thought was why were they
attacking him? the army charged at him his charged back and fought him way to the back where he exicuted the commander
with ease.suddenly all the fomors went on there knees. he memory of morrgant telling him about a strength
compition to decide the new lord of fomors so seeing as he had killed the "new"one he guessed that he was now their new
lord. after a couple more years he he gets a summon from morrgant.he asks him to investigate starange disturbance in
the shadow realm.
She spoke trying to seem brave, "Go on finish me like you did all the others," her voice quivering with fear. He just stared at her his eyes sharp and hard. "I see no reason to kill that which poses no threat to me. Your attack held no malicious intent, only fear. However if you try to strike me again I will strike you down. " He slung his sword over his back and walked away. She stayed on the ground looking at him for a few moments then got up and followed him for what reason even she didn't know. Finding his way out of the cave, the blue haired girl Aoirohime close behind, he came out into land unfamiliar to him. "Where is this place?" he asked her. "My kind call this place Paradise." She replied. He looked around and saw no war or death and decided he might stay here and try a life he had never known…
What type of character do you play? cold, fallen Spell Sword
What is your Mabinogi schedule? normally try to be on about 1.5 to 2 hours a day about 5 times a week.
Last edited by Durandarte on Mon Jul 16, 2012 11:25 pm; edited 1 time in total
Durandarte- Frenetic Fuzzy Fox
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
Judging by bio, it's Milletian. That's easy to tell.
I believe it's going to be asked, but who is your brother?
Also. Clean up the bio. A lot. Like fix grammar and make it more readable. There are issues all over the place and I can't find where one sentence ends and another one starts. That's is a request that will help a lot of people out, because a messy bio, grammatically that is, isn't going to really get your the approvals to get in quickly. Also keep in mind that Mainstream Story doesn't happen to your character ICly, it's all OOC events, and NPCs, such as Morgant, don't take favortism, so yea... Just a few things to keep in mind. But all in all...please make your bio more legible, right now I have serious issues reading it.
I believe it's going to be asked, but who is your brother?
Also. Clean up the bio. A lot. Like fix grammar and make it more readable. There are issues all over the place and I can't find where one sentence ends and another one starts. That's is a request that will help a lot of people out, because a messy bio, grammatically that is, isn't going to really get your the approvals to get in quickly. Also keep in mind that Mainstream Story doesn't happen to your character ICly, it's all OOC events, and NPCs, such as Morgant, don't take favortism, so yea... Just a few things to keep in mind. But all in all...please make your bio more legible, right now I have serious issues reading it.
Glaceon- Glas Ghoblehht
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
^ That. If we're going to do anything with this bio, we're all going to need to be able to read it just a bit better! I'd greatly appreciate any time put into cleaning this up. Thank you!
Vayne- Retired
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
I would also appreciate a slight edit to this. It's a bit difficult to read. I remember you mentioning this was a past fanfic, so maybe doing some minor edits would make this clearer for all of us. =]
Dellinger- Dragon
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
There are some spelling errors, and there are numerous punctuation errors. Correcting these along with the grammar, will make this much more readable. I would also like to see the appropriate number of paragraphs appear. (I was getting a headache trying to read it, so I stopped.)
Kenelm- Mentor
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about the bio
Sorry i wrote it in note pad so the lines spacing and spelling may be off. As for my sister (if its brother in the bio i need to fix that) its one of my alts, though im rarely on her often nowadays. The plot was made for a fan fic about a year back, I had debated redoing it, and I probably still will, but a few of your members I met the other day just said go ahead and post it. I have a lot of time today so I will review it and repost it as soon as I can. Once again my apoligies.
Durandarte- Frenetic Fuzzy Fox
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New Bio
Edited and adapted bio for Durandarte. Feel free to point out any issues and i will try to fix them as soon as i can.
A Short Biography Of Your Character: Durandal came to Erinn and settled into the life of a paladin in Emain Macha. He lived a reasonably peaceful life and was well liked among those in town for his warm demeanor and openness. When the Tragedy of Emain Macha befell the town he tried his best to defend the town, but was eventually overwhelmed. When he came to the town was in ruins, but just on the edge of hearing he heard a whimper. He rushed to the source of the sound and found a young red headed girl named Yoshinbu. He took her in and bandaged her up. After she had a full recovery he left her in the care of the paladins to seek out the hero Lugh and train under him. After years of searching and dead ends he hears a rumor of a ghost if Fiodh dungeon. When he reached the end he found no ghost, but Morgant. After a short clash Morgant looked at him and said "I can see the hatred in your eyes, but it is not for me, no it is for yourself. Not being able to defend your precious town. Come with me and I will show you how to harness it into a true power." Realizing what he said was true he became his apprentice.
He did numerous errands in dungeon for his master, and on one of those runs he met a shy blue haired siren. Her name was Aoirohime and she seemed almost uncomfortable when he entered the room. She tried to combat him, but he easily bested her, leaving her on the ground he started to walk away, but she called after him "Why don't you finish me?"
He turned and stared at her, his eyes sharp and his words cold "You didn't attack with malice, just fear. Besides your no threat to me. However if you wish to leave this life you may follow me, your new one may not be easy, but you may like it more." And he just began to walk away. She hesitated, but followed after the man she feared yet felt a warm feeling in her chest for. When she left the dungeon he just walked away from her. "Talk to Krystal, she can help you."
Soon after he became a Dark Knight and left his tutelage under The Dark Lord. He tracked down his adopted sister(Yoshinbu) and found she had done well for herself. He went about his business, but always kept an eye on her from the shadows…
A Short Biography Of Your Character: Durandal came to Erinn and settled into the life of a paladin in Emain Macha. He lived a reasonably peaceful life and was well liked among those in town for his warm demeanor and openness. When the Tragedy of Emain Macha befell the town he tried his best to defend the town, but was eventually overwhelmed. When he came to the town was in ruins, but just on the edge of hearing he heard a whimper. He rushed to the source of the sound and found a young red headed girl named Yoshinbu. He took her in and bandaged her up. After she had a full recovery he left her in the care of the paladins to seek out the hero Lugh and train under him. After years of searching and dead ends he hears a rumor of a ghost if Fiodh dungeon. When he reached the end he found no ghost, but Morgant. After a short clash Morgant looked at him and said "I can see the hatred in your eyes, but it is not for me, no it is for yourself. Not being able to defend your precious town. Come with me and I will show you how to harness it into a true power." Realizing what he said was true he became his apprentice.
He did numerous errands in dungeon for his master, and on one of those runs he met a shy blue haired siren. Her name was Aoirohime and she seemed almost uncomfortable when he entered the room. She tried to combat him, but he easily bested her, leaving her on the ground he started to walk away, but she called after him "Why don't you finish me?"
He turned and stared at her, his eyes sharp and his words cold "You didn't attack with malice, just fear. Besides your no threat to me. However if you wish to leave this life you may follow me, your new one may not be easy, but you may like it more." And he just began to walk away. She hesitated, but followed after the man she feared yet felt a warm feeling in her chest for. When she left the dungeon he just walked away from her. "Talk to Krystal, she can help you."
Soon after he became a Dark Knight and left his tutelage under The Dark Lord. He tracked down his adopted sister(Yoshinbu) and found she had done well for herself. He went about his business, but always kept an eye on her from the shadows…
Durandarte- Frenetic Fuzzy Fox
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
The only -real- issue I'm seeing, and going to point out like I did before, is:
The Mainstream Questlines, Basically the Main G1-G16 quests, don't happen ICly. So what this means is the whole meeting Morgant and all that stuff in the bio isn't going to fly. Secondly, Mainstream NPCs, no matter who they are, will -not- show favortism towards Player Characters. These are the main two issues I can see at the moment.
We can make up our own NPCS, but the Mainstream ones are only set to do their job, and unless given permission by the council, are only going to do their job. Mainstream NPCs, to clarify, are the actual NPCs in the game that serve a purpose, usually they are named (Agnes, Beggar, Owens, etc etc). However, depending on the city, you are able to make an NPC up to have them do whatever, name it whatever you want, but usually they have a set job, like Healer No. 1243 named Claire or something. However, Agnes will never show favoritism towards us. Heck, you leave them be a few days RL and they forget you exist basically.
As for the whole Generation thing, the Council has already decided that an NPC did all the mainstream stuff, and not us. IT's mainly put there for the reason that things happen that can't happen over 100 times over and over again, due to multiple people all doing their quests, multiple copies of the One-of-a-kind sword existing being found. I hope that makes sense.
Perhaps you could talk with Dellinger and he'll help you out with making a more manageable bio. It's nice, but I don't think the fanfic here is going to work out ICly.
The Mainstream Questlines, Basically the Main G1-G16 quests, don't happen ICly. So what this means is the whole meeting Morgant and all that stuff in the bio isn't going to fly. Secondly, Mainstream NPCs, no matter who they are, will -not- show favortism towards Player Characters. These are the main two issues I can see at the moment.
We can make up our own NPCS, but the Mainstream ones are only set to do their job, and unless given permission by the council, are only going to do their job. Mainstream NPCs, to clarify, are the actual NPCs in the game that serve a purpose, usually they are named (Agnes, Beggar, Owens, etc etc). However, depending on the city, you are able to make an NPC up to have them do whatever, name it whatever you want, but usually they have a set job, like Healer No. 1243 named Claire or something. However, Agnes will never show favoritism towards us. Heck, you leave them be a few days RL and they forget you exist basically.
As for the whole Generation thing, the Council has already decided that an NPC did all the mainstream stuff, and not us. IT's mainly put there for the reason that things happen that can't happen over 100 times over and over again, due to multiple people all doing their quests, multiple copies of the One-of-a-kind sword existing being found. I hope that makes sense.
Perhaps you could talk with Dellinger and he'll help you out with making a more manageable bio. It's nice, but I don't think the fanfic here is going to work out ICly.
Glaceon- Glas Ghoblehht
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
Well, there is a small trick I've been saving for a rainy day. While I planned using it on one of my future characters. Here it is,
*drum rolls* He could be from an alternative Erinn. It's possible that, if he somehow died (maybe anti-millitean weapon, or if he wasn't a millitean), he goes to our version of Erinn.
*drum rolls* He could be from an alternative Erinn. It's possible that, if he somehow died (maybe anti-millitean weapon, or if he wasn't a millitean), he goes to our version of Erinn.
Xeek- Retired
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
Xeek wrote:Well, there is a small trick I've been saving for a rainy day. While I planned using it on one of my future characters. Here it is,
*drum rolls* He could be from an alternative Erinn. It's possible that, if he somehow died (maybe anti-millitean weapon, or if he wasn't a millitean), he goes to our version of Erinn.
Actually I used that on a Eu players bio to get them into the guild.
Teoxihuitl- Sweet Tart Sucubus
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
Darn.. I guess it won't be original but it'll get the point done.
He'll just have to change a few things. Of course, the final thing is his call.
He'll just have to change a few things. Of course, the final thing is his call.
Xeek- Retired
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
If I could I actually might like to run with that. What kind of changes would you recommend so I don't seem like I'm ripping him off (sorry I don't know what was written so :/)Xeek wrote:Darn.. I guess it won't be original but it'll get the point done.
He'll just have to change a few things. Of course, the final thing is his call.
Durandarte- Frenetic Fuzzy Fox
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
Oh, no changes like that. I mean changes like, how he died. But it depends on the rules of the world. Basically, what killed him and make him come to our Erinn. Or how did he come to our world, if he didn't die.
Xeek- Retired
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a newer (and hopefully fixed) bio
A Short Biography Of Your Character: Durandarte Originated in Juralshim, a place of endless war, death and rebirth. He had no childhood memories, only memories of endless death and pain, enough to make even the cheeriest man cold and cynical. Through uncountable battles he honed in skills with blades, but even with the skills he had he was struck down by a warrior in black armor.
When he awoke he went to grab his blade "Rajashi" and get back into the fray, but looking around he noticed he looked like he was in a almost cave like area, a large statue showing some angel like figure above him. Seeing only one path he followed the cavern, before long he encountered creature of a nature he had never seen. Seeing weapons and malicious intent in their eyes he cut down them down. He made his way forward, soon finding himself in a large room with a blue haired girl wearing a mask. He made his way past her without any word. When he was several steps past her she tried to attack but, he slammed her to the ground and held her and sword point.
She spoke trying to seem brave, "Go on finish me like you did all the others," her voice quivering with fear.
He just stared at her his eyes sharp and hard. "I see no reason to kill that which poses no threat to me. Your attack held no malicious intent, only fear. However if you try to strike me again I will strike you down. " He slung his sword over his back and walked away. She stayed on the ground looking at him for a few moments then got up and followed him for what reason even she didn't know.
Finding his way out of the cave, the blue haired girl Aoirohime close behind, he came out into land unfamiliar to him. "Where is this place?" he asked her.
"My kind call this place Paradise." She replied. He looked around and saw no war or death and decided he might stay here and try a life he had never known…
When he awoke he went to grab his blade "Rajashi" and get back into the fray, but looking around he noticed he looked like he was in a almost cave like area, a large statue showing some angel like figure above him. Seeing only one path he followed the cavern, before long he encountered creature of a nature he had never seen. Seeing weapons and malicious intent in their eyes he cut down them down. He made his way forward, soon finding himself in a large room with a blue haired girl wearing a mask. He made his way past her without any word. When he was several steps past her she tried to attack but, he slammed her to the ground and held her and sword point.
She spoke trying to seem brave, "Go on finish me like you did all the others," her voice quivering with fear.
He just stared at her his eyes sharp and hard. "I see no reason to kill that which poses no threat to me. Your attack held no malicious intent, only fear. However if you try to strike me again I will strike you down. " He slung his sword over his back and walked away. She stayed on the ground looking at him for a few moments then got up and followed him for what reason even she didn't know.
Finding his way out of the cave, the blue haired girl Aoirohime close behind, he came out into land unfamiliar to him. "Where is this place?" he asked her.
"My kind call this place Paradise." She replied. He looked around and saw no war or death and decided he might stay here and try a life he had never known…
Durandarte- Frenetic Fuzzy Fox
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
Story is confusing, how did he GET to Erinn?
Glaceon- Glas Ghoblehht
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
He was killed back on his world and when he was resurrected he was just there, plain and simple.
Durandarte- Frenetic Fuzzy Fox
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
Approved, someone should make his latest post the first post as it is his current bio.
Teoxihuitl- Sweet Tart Sucubus
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
Approved. There's work that could be done, but it's minor and it'll certainly work itself out soon enough, my friend. =]
Release the hounds~
Release the hounds~
Dellinger- Dragon
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
Be sure to apply at the guild stone if you have yet to do so.
Moving this thread to approved.
Moving this thread to approved.
Guest- Guest
Re: New Member-Durandarte
Xeek invited me the other day so i should have a application in already.Soifa Toten wrote:Be sure to apply at the guild stone if you have yet to do so.
Moving this thread to approved.
and thank you everyone
Durandarte- Frenetic Fuzzy Fox
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Re: New Member-Durandarte
Alright, once the leader or officer is online they should let you in.
Guest- Guest
Re: New Member-Durandarte
okay. I'll be waiting, hope to see you all soon.
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