The Origin, Derez.

Character Name: Anmaino and Derez.

How You Heard About The RP Society: I've been here before.

How Long Have You Been Roleplaying? Three, four, five, seven years? god i can't remember @w@

Is English Your First Language? Yes

A Short Biography Of Your Character:
There once was a young married couple who lived in Bangor. Their names were Mariana, and Tarkhus. They were a poor family with one child, a boy named Anmaino. Anmaino was an energetic child who loved to fight using swords. He was talented and well respected. One day, when Anmaino was 15 he wanted to prove his skills and so, he wondered into Barri dungeon. He had such an easy time defeating the monsters. He couldn't understand, why was it that no one ever came into these abandoned mines? He eventually got his answer when he reached the large door and opened the lock with the red key. Five Ogres clad in heavy, thick steel carrying humongous Hammers. Anmaino tried his hardest but could not even leave a scratch before the Ogres crushed his body, The Ogres didn't even need to use their hammers. Anmaino soon learned why, as a man in a black robe, wearing a mask with the symbol of the Fomors written upon it.

"This is the best you could find?! A child! Our lord shall not hear of such nonsense! do away with him this instant." The man said as he turned around. But then, Anmaino grabbed the man's ankle. "Don't you dare..." He said barely breathing. The man looked back down to the boy glaring through his mask. "Unhand me boy." The man threatened. "No... I refuse to be looked down on just cause i'm a kid! i'm gonna be the world's greatest swordsman you got that?!" He yelled mustering all of his strength to look up at the man. "So you better stop treating me like trash, or i'm gonna have to kick your ass!" He said as he couched up some of his blood. The Masked man simply chuckled at the boy. "Greatest swordsman huh? Well you'll be needing much more power than that to achieve such a goal boy. That's it, I've decided it'll be you. Ogres take this boy with me into the shadows." He said walking into a puff of black smoke which seamed to act as a portal. The Ogres soon followed carrying the boy.

Inside the boy awoke, his wounds healed. He looked around and saw he was in a strange place like he'd never seen before. "Wh-where am I?" He questioned in his daze. "Welcome to the world of the Fomors, I have brought you here to make a deal." Came the voice of the Masked man just before he walked up to the boy from the shadows. "What kind of deal?" Anmaino asked with his guard up and ready to fight. "You wish to become the greatest swordsman, i'm willing to give you a sword and a new power to help you in the journey." The man said holding a Bastard sword with a black blade. "This is a most powerful weapon with the power to cut down any opponent in the right hands." The man said holding the handle out to the boy. "If you take this sword and become a master swordsman with it, then i will allow you to live on in your pursuit, but if you chose not, then i shall have no choice but to kill you." The man stated. "fine, if it means i can become the greatest swordsman, then i accept this sword and it's powers, whatever they may be." Anmaino said grasping the weapon's handle. Just then waves of darkness manifested and surrounded Anmaino's body as he transformed into a Dark Knight! "Now then, what is your name?" The Masked man asked. "Anmaino..." Replied the boy now standing there in black armor holding his weapon. "That won't do..." Said the man. "You need a name that fits that of a swordsman, a name that can strike fear into the hearts of others... I know... From now on... you are... Derez!"

What type of character do you play? Swordsman.

What is your Mabinogi schedule? Almost every day.

It looks good enough I can provide a tentative approval. One thing, though: If he was born in Erinn, why did he earn a rebirth?

It's not exactly a Rebirth per-say. It's more like, the orb forced his body to regress to that of a child but because it was only physical regression his mind stayed the same. Get what i mean?

I don't get it....

Espeon (glacia) wrote:I don't get it....

what don't you get? i shall try to my best ability to help you understand.

How something like that would exist in the world of Erinn mainly...

Just a random magical item with a random magical curse that forces the person to regress physically and get shot to some random location.

I don't either. As far as I am AWARE (aware being the functional word here), nothing like this exists for Erinn born.

Mariella Kana wrote:I don't either. As far as I am AWARE (aware being the functional word here), nothing like this exists for Erinn born.

how would a magic infused object matter to Errin born or non-Errin born?

It's not that. It SOUNDS like rebirth, but isn't. Like, the superficial part of rebirth. Age potions, however, don't seem to affect Milletians in particular, so that's the only thing I see working here.

Fixed!

Take your time to make the character introduction coherent, please. I am unable to fully approve the application as it is.

Still confused. He is erinn born, yet able to be "knocked out cold" by Ifrit and get tossed all the way to Tir? You're story sounds like it's trying to be interesting, but isn't making very logical or progressional sense. As far as I know, if Ifrit were to slam his hammer on an Erinn-born's head, that's death.

Derez?Any Response?

sorry, been busy the last few days, i'll get to working on this during the weekend. @w@

and... done! @w@

Spoiler:

Otherwise, everything else I really like =D And offer approval of the revised bio.

No, Aura is correct. That's why it's in a spoiler tag, Kala. From what Mithos has said, that is what I understand.

The continuity is much better, and the events are much more plausible.

Do note that being an Erinn-born means that if and when you die, there won't be any returning.

i understand this, yes. owo

I can offer a complete approval, then.

awesome. o3o

How, in-game, do you justify your sword? You said it's

"a most powerful weapon with the power to cut down any opponent in the right hands."

That sounds fairly close to god-modding to me. Is there any way to tone it down? Or are you going to attribute all advances in skill to the sword?
Other than that, I wish you luck on the approval process.

Peldari wrote:How, in-game, do you justify your sword? You said it's

"a most powerful weapon with the power to cut down any opponent in the right hands."

That sounds fairly close to god-modding to me. Is there any way to tone it down? Or are you going to attribute all advances in skill to the sword?
Other than that, I wish you luck on the approval process.

have you ever watched a good renaissance flic? They always say things like that, though the sword is powerful, it's seriously very little more than a normal Bastard Sword. It's real power is basically turning normal humans into Dark Knights, as most know a Dark Knight's form is normally only obtained from being a Fomor (unconfirmed in game) or by a Paladin accepting the Dark Knight's power. In the flash back in G3 where you see Duncan's exlover be a Dark Knight, she seems to be the only character of the same as i have made Derez, even though there is no special item that changed her, i felt for the majority being Paladins gone to the Fomorian side, i felt i needed a tool for it to make since that a small child could just, become a dark knight.

-Thank you for your vote of confidence though, i hope for a pleasurable end to all of this aswell. ^^