New member - xgrimzer

Character Name: xgrimzer

How You Heard About The RP Society: I'v heard about it from a friend.

How Long Have You Been Roleplaying? I think I'v been playing for 2 years now, I started mabinogi about 2 months ago.

Is English Your First Language? Yes, English is my first language.

A Short Biography Of Your Character: As Duncan recalls, grimzer was left on his doorstep during a thunderstorm crying his little head off and soaking wet when Duncan picked him up, after realizing that this little guy has been abandoned he quickly picks up on supporting and looking after grimzer's well-being.
After grimzer was 13 years old Duncan began sending him off to help Tir Chonaill residents with working in the fields, shortly after grimzer was done working he saw Dilys healing wounded warriors and mages exiting the Alby Dungeon, he sensed the appreciation from the wanderers and the feeling of helping injured ones.
On the night of his 15 birthday he announced to Duncan that he would learn all he can from Ranald and Lassar, then be on his way to find a permanent town to be a Healer or join with wandering warriors.
He has since been seen roaming Tir Chonaill, Dunbarton, Emain Macha, Bangor, and Vales area. Entering dungeons with friends and wanderers.

What type of character do you play? I would really like to be known as a Healer, I have basic combat, moderate heal, and I'm working with First-aid.

What is your Mabinogi schedule?[ I play weekends evenings to early mornings and during the week once or twice.

Well, if you'd like to be a healer, you should really meet Auron(One of my characters). He volunteers at Tir's Healer House and is there almost all the time. Also, pay attention to the guild bulletin, a "club" for healers is in its planning stages.

As for your bio, would xgrimzer be his actual name? So you know, your character's name doesn't have to be your In-game name, if that's the reason you went with xgrimzer. Just wondering here.

On a side note: It's great to see so many people applying. xD

Yeah I was thinking of taking out the "x".

Grimzer sounds more name-like than with the x. xD

I changed it to grimzer, sounds way better

Mhm. I'd help out more, but I feel I'm already sorta overstepping my boundaries here. I suggest you wait for a member of the council to give their two cents on this or approval...and whatnot. Good luck!

Simple question:
Millitean or Tuatha De Danann.

Grimzer is a Millitean.

Alright, your bio seems fine and easy to work on. A few spelling and grammatical errors here and there, but nothing hideous.

Now we just need some input from the councilors and mentors.

The bio is interesting and quite creative in my opinion. The only thing I can offer is checking spelling and grammar a bit. A tedious thing I know, but it's just we understand the posts clearly. The Kaye approves of this application!

I tried my best at fixing some of my mistakes.

First off, I'm not too wild about "Grimzer" being a given name. However, I am completely fine with it being a nickname. As a nickname, it could make for an interesting role-play path. (We're all about the creativity, here.)

There aren't too many grammatical mistakes. You've managed to average one run-on per paragraph. There's also one sentence that starts off awkward: "During the night of..." would flow better with "On the night of..."

I fixed that one sentence, I really like how it sounds now!

Overall, the only thing I see is the same thing Ken was stating.
Treat grimzor as a nickname, and... well:

Those commentaries aside, I approve

*stamps with Cat On Lap*

xgrimzer wrote:...
A Short Biography Of Your Character: As Duncan recalls, grimzer was left on his doorstep during a thunderstorm crying his little head off and soaking wet when Duncan picked him up, after realizing that this little guy has been abandoned he quickly picks up on supporting and looking after grimzer's well-being.
After grimzer was 13 years old Duncan began sending him off to help Tir Chonaill residents with working in the fields, shortly after grimzer was done working he saw Dilys healing wounded warriors and mages exiting the Alby Dungeon, he sensed the appreciation from the wanderers and the feeling of helping injured ones.
On the night of his 15 birthday he announced to Duncan that he would learn all he can from Ranald and Lassar, then be on his way to find a permanent town to be a Healer or join with wandering warriors.
He has since been seen roaming Tir Chonaill, Dunbarton, Emain Macha, Bangor, and Vales area. Entering dungeons with friends and wanderers.
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You have nine sentences, and a little more awkward wording that needs to be worked on.

I would advise you work on strengthening your writing skills. You should be able to take writing classes at your local community college.

I'm also willing to give suggestions in writing skills, but Kenhelm does give some good advise.

Well we have two officially stated approvals and I could add the third if there are no strong objection?

Thanks for approvals councilors and mentors.