New Member - Shuyin2

Character Name: Shuyin2

How You Heard About The RP Society: I was once a roleplayer in this very guild, however it has been a long time and I wish to use Shuyin (which is one of my alternate characters) as my main roleplayer considering I play on him the most now.

How Long Have You Been Roleplaying? I have been roleplaying for about five or six years now.

Is English Your First Language? Indeed.

A Short Biography Of Your Character: Shuyin, a Milletian, is a skilled archer and a powerful beast tamer. He is always young, considering he is an elf. His past life, before entering the soul stream and coming to Erinn, was that of a strong warrior who was skilled in the use of a crossbow and bow alike, he also had a strange ability to ward off wild animals from attacking him, which later became useful once he came to Erinn. He died in his past life from a heart attack that he suffered at the age of 67. After Nao guided him to Erinn in the soul stream, he chose to rebirth as an Elven archer. He felt that Nao and the slipstream allowed him true life in the world of Erinn. His abilities as a warrior have travled with him, giving him increased awareness to danger and an upgraded strength. His "beast tongue" also passed over from his previous life, giving him the ability to ward off some animals. However, rebirthing lessened his ability to do this, so some creatures are not affected by it, the ones that are now aid Shuyin in battle. His main life-partner, or Shir-rah as the dragonkiin call it, is Shiva-ha. Shiva-ha is a strong female ice dragon that Shuyin met when even he was young on Errin. They have been partners ever since. Shuyin is fairly fluent in the dragonkiin tounge, and can often be seen talking to Shiva in he native tounge, however she can speak Shuyin's language if need be. Shuyin was exiled from Filia because Shiva was destroying buildings as she was growing up, causing too much damage they decided to rid Filia of the pests.

What type of character do you play? Archer / Beast Tamer

What is your Mabinogi schedule?[ Usually late afternoon on weekdays (-5:00 UTC US and Canada), and most of the day every other weekend.

I know you said cast into the world without a mother and father, but that could be an orphan. Is he a Tuathan or a Milletian? If he is a milletian, be sure to add info of his past life.

Edited the biography section.

Thank you.

I would suggest being a Milletian is the first thing you should add, then tell HOW he came to Erinn too.

So you would like me to restructure my biography? Or just put the fact I am a Milletian first and then explain how I got to Erinn, then reformat my bio to fit around that.

You would probably have to remake it. Your character cannot have birth parents and still be a Milletian. Unless you added on how he died as the third sentence, then what was his thoughts, how he felt while entering, what his experience was like while entering, then you can leave things how they are. If you do make those changes, I would advise you change the last three sentences too.

The only problem is I have never fully understood the history or Erinn nor it's people, perhaps you could explain it with detail? That would really help.

Milletians: Souls that were guided by Nao to the Soul Stream to come to Erinn. Their purpose was to fight. (But it honestly is not needed ICly if your character chooses to or not) Ways they came into the soul stream are usually death. After death on Erinn they may be reborn with a new body but with the same soul.

Tuathans: Are natives on Erinn who were born on the planet. They cannot go to the Soul Stream. If died, they are dead forever.

This is probably the only thing you need to check up for right now, I hope it clears up any questions you have.

Ok, I have updated the biography section from what I understood of your posting. I hope that clears it up.

NOTE: I will not often use the dragonkiin language with Shiva-ha in order to lessen the confusion.

Cyler wrote:Milletians: Souls that were guided by Nao to the Soul Stream to come to Erinn. Their purpose was to fight. (But it honestly is not needed ICly if your character chooses to or not) Ways they came into the soul stream are usually death. After death on Erinn they may be reborn with a new body but with the same soul.

Coming to the soul stream isn't a choice and you didn't explained how he came actually. He would most likely have to die like all other milletians who have come to Erinn.

So, what you are saying, is that in order for Shuyin to have come to Erinn, he would have had to die, entering the soul stream, and would be taken by Nao to Erinn where he was reborn as whatever his soul wanted to be? And this was not a choice, Nao just took every soul in the stream.

OR

After whatever happened to create the universe, all Milletians were souls before being born, taken to Erinn by Nao, and released into what is a rebirthing.

She guided the souls. And you can come in as a Human, Elf, or giant, or something else depending on what your character was in his previous world. Say he was part cat, part human. That trait would be passed over too.

Shuyin, a Milletian, is a skilled archer and a powerful beast tamer. He is always young, considering he is an elf. His past life, before entering the soul stream and coming to Erinn, was that of a strong warrior who was skilled in the use of a crossbow and bow alike, he also had a strange ability to ward off wild animals from attacking him, which later became useful once he came to Erinn. After Nao guided him to Erinn in the soul stream, he chose to rebirth as an Evlen archer. He felt that Nao and the slipstream allowed him true life in the world of Erinn. His abilities as a warrior have travled with him, giving him increased awareness to danger and an upgraded strength. His "beast tongue" also passed over from his previous life, giving him the ability to ward off some animals. However, rebirthing lessened his ability to do this, so some creatures are not affected by it, the ones that are now aid Shuyin in battle. His main life-partner, or Shir-rah as the dragonkiin call it, is Shiva-ha. Shiva-ha is a strong female ice dragon that Shuyin met when even he was young on Errin. They have been partners ever since. Shuyin is fairly fluent in the dragonkiin tounge, and can often be seen talking to Shiva in he native tounge, however she can speak Shuyin's language if need be.

Perhaps this is a bit better? I'm sorry that this is taking me so many tries to understand. It's almost like learning a new religion for me.

The "Beast tongue" ability would need to be approved in the Powers section before used IC.

OK, I have made the necessary post.

Second note I forgot to point out, you didn't say HOW he died too. You just said he entered the soul stream.

Shuyin, a Milletian, is a skilled archer and a powerful beast tamer. He is always young, considering he is an elf. His past life, before entering the soul stream and coming to Erinn, was that of a strong warrior who was skilled in the use of a crossbow and bow alike, he also had a strange ability to ward off wild animals from attacking him, which later became useful once he came to Erinn. He died in his past life from a heart attack that he suffered at the age of 67. After Nao guided him to Erinn in the soul stream, he chose to rebirth as an Elven archer. He felt that Nao and the slipstream allowed him true life in the world of Erinn. His abilities as a warrior have travled with him, giving him increased awareness to danger and an upgraded strength. His "beast tongue" also passed over from his previous life, giving him the ability to ward off some animals. However, rebirthing lessened his ability to do this, so some creatures are not affected by it, the ones that are now aid Shuyin in battle. His main life-partner, or Shir-rah as the dragonkiin call it, is Shiva-ha. Shiva-ha is a strong female ice dragon that Shuyin met when even he was young on Errin. They have been partners ever since. Shuyin is fairly fluent in the dragonkiin tounge, and can often be seen talking to Shiva in he native tounge, however she can speak Shuyin's language if need be.

Fixed.

Approved

A few errors, but nothing that can't be worked out within the guild. I'll offer my approval.

You have my approval as well.

Iraselle Majaktobor wrote:A few errors, but nothing that can't be worked out within the guild. I'll offer my approval.

Grammar and spelling errors or plot errors?

Thank you for approving, all of you.

I beleive it was grammar and spelling, which I saw too, but yes, will be fixed over time. :3